Disclaimer –
Derek's work has been registered at the U.S. Library of Congress, so it would be a terrible financial idea to plagiarize or use any of the material found on this website for your own purposes. Nevertheless, enjoy the writing!Eclipses
Plot: A notorious gang, The Eclipses (they only strike during the day) is trying to gain notoriety, but things get sticky when the leader, Loose-Lips Johnny, has to take his unknowing daughter to work on Take-Your-Daughter-To-Work Day.
Not technically a play, this sitcom pilot was written for another competition, which similarly passed over it, likely for more marketable ideas. The characters from this play have been used before several times by myself, in a full-length (as of now unfinished) play, a short one-act, and even in my second novel. However, here I felt I adequately put very silly characters into a sitcom with broad mainstream appeal. I apparently was wrong.
Personal ratings:
Intelligence: 5
Silliness: 8
Characters: 9
Marketability: 4
Overall: 6
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